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She moves but slightly with every breath. Her body falling and rising as I watch her, and I smile. How could I not? Seeing those green-and-brown eyes so large, her own smile one of mischief-laced invitation. Her arms move away from where they were folded to tuck beneath her head as she stretches completely. She has inched closer with her stretch, and speaks with her mouth just below my ear.
“Tell me a story, Love..” She whispers, the ‘L’ so articulated that her tongue flickers briefly against my neck. The touch is thrilling, and I cannot help but lift slightly against it. She giggles as though she knows what she has done; and I realize that of course she knows what she’s done…it was probably finely orchestrated in her mind before she even thought to ask for a story. As it is, her lips are still against me, parted as though to demonstrate that possibility exists, but I’ve come to know better. I can hear her tongue moving inside her mouth with slick, wet noises…but it doesn’t come near.
“A long story, or a not-so-long one?” I counter, trying to obtain another now sorely sought ‘L’ in her answer. She is not the only one who can manipulate…I watch her eyes with interest, and place a hand gently on the top of her head, trailing my thumb across the exposed skin of the part in her hair. I can feel her smile, as a broadening of the lips and as a double-burst of warm air against my skin.
“A good story…The…um..” She stumbles, smiling again as she does so and the very air tenses as she works things out in her mind. Sounding slightly apologetic, she starts again. “The length doesn’t matter.” And again, a moistened touch flashes against me. Her lips close on my neck in a quick token of a kiss. “And if it’s a good story, then I promise to repay you with a short-story.” This time it’s not just a smile but a grin.
“Okay then,” I reply, wriggling close to her and letting my hand drop from her head to drape across the dip above her waist. “Deal.”
©2005-2009 ~GreenBayonet
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A first person POV piece about..well..

You'll see.

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:iconstercusaccidit:
you know I really like this piece, it just reminds me of the quiet times between two lovers
the spaces in between that we tend to take for granted
the first person perspective helps create those still frames in my mind

jay-
:icongreenbayonet:
This piece was hard to write because it's actually..from my real boyfriend's perspective...and the 'she' in the piece is myself. I felt confident enough to play with his point of view and so I gave it a shot..and I'm glad that it was successful and you enjoyed it. Thank you!

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I can see the whole of time and space, every single atom of your existence and I divide them. Everything must come to dust. All things. Everything dies.
:iconstercusaccidit:
::smiles:: i'm a fan ^^ promise me that when you write a book you'll send me a copy??
:icongreenbayonet:
I'm actually working on writing a novel right now, it's being co-written with ~ Fingersnapped. It's very promising... but we're slow. =D

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I can see the whole of time and space, every single atom of your existence and I divide them. Everything must come to dust. All things. Everything dies.
:iconstercusaccidit:
Send send send! annnnd autograph! ..i'll send you a FREEEEE evil side-kick if you do?!
:icongreenbayonet:
Hah. Well. It's only got the first three chapters finished, plus the ending..and not really 'finished'.. just first draft. But anything on this deviant art account with the characters Cenaahchet, Evranys, Dale, or Robin in it is backstory and additional materials for it.

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I can see the whole of time and space, every single atom of your existence and I divide them. Everything must come to dust. All things. Everything dies.
:iconstercusaccidit:
ah.i've read most of your stuff so I guess i'll be pretty familiar with the back story
in the book, will you make reference to the back story or will you actually have the back story
take up a chapter or two?
:icongreenbayonet:
It'd probably just be referenced...only.. referenced in a way that readers will still get what happened...The backstories, for me, were just a way to help create the characters and create what they'd been through in the past in order to understand how they'd act later.. when the current novel takes place. I'd love to add the backstories in...like an 'apendix' form. But! We shall see. It'd prolly better to finish the novel itself, first. Which is difficult....because it involves both Gavin and I to be up to writing and have the time to do so on the same days.. which is rough to manage. But...eventually.

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I can see the whole of time and space, every single atom of your existence and I divide them. Everything must come to dust. All things. Everything dies.
:iconstercusaccidit:
::nods:: creating a back story allows you to flow better and write the characters with a level of ease and familarity that doesn't come with creating one from scratch just for *that* book.

The problem with me is that I get easily frustrated with myself which leads to me throwing whatever I wrote out of the window....or into a fire..-.- :twitch: which has been done more then not

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